The (#%^&) Falcon (*%!@) Fighter
Posts: 210
(12/7/03 11:12 pm)
Starting the line of re-posts...
This is a re-post of my story (Ryukyu the Master - A tale of Limewall) except in the prologue there is an additional half-1 page. THe other chapters will be original (and in my opinion, terrible lots of mistakes and I'm just lazy to correct.) then hopefully I'll have Chap. 7 out by then. These were written a couple years ago, and I find most of the chapters are either short or stupid (I used 20 font to start ). But there will be improvements starting Chap. 7. If you can hang tight with me till then, then please do so.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ryukyu the master-A Tale of Limewall
A Pokémon/Rewall crossover
Part 1 of 3
‘Book’ 1
Prologue
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Ryukyu was a trainer like no other. His six favorite Pokémon were Ninetales, Scizor, Pidgeot, Blastoise, Gengar and Primeape. He also was the lucky owner of a Mewtwo like no other. This Mewtwo did no fight unless either Ryukyu told him to (which he never did) or was provoked to. He instead preferred making sure the Pokémon he had to face couldn’t move so he and his trainer could escape. This was the only time Mewtwo would be used. His Pokémon all had names of their own except for Mewtwo. They all forced Mewtwo to not tell Ryukyu their real names because they didn’t want him to have to remember so many names at a time. Ryukyu also taught them some special moves. He was a gifted and special trainer for sure. His Ninetales, Scizor and Pidgeot were very fast as in 1 second to run/fly across the globe. Ryukyu likes his Ninetales the best though he never showed it. He used to be a gym leader before he decided that being a gym leader just wasn’t the life for him.
He lived in a building that was made by his Pokémon and some of his friends and their Pokémon and of course, him himself helped build it. The building glistened in the sun for it was made out of limestone, not just normal bricks. He and his friends were happily dining inside the dinning hall they had inside the large building when the front doors were flung open.
“Pika, Pika!” A Pikachu said as it came in. Mewtwo’s eyes widened with fear as he heard the Pikachu out.
“This Pikachu’s name is Dome. He says that an evil Entei is coming with a band of badbeasts to take over this building.” Ryukyu thought about this. He never liked that Entei ever since he heard about it when he was in Saffron City.
“Dome, please, sit down. Ninetales will you get him some tea please?” Speedy the Ninetales was back in a second with a full cup of steaming coffee
“What took so long and why do you have coffee instead of tea?” Ryukyu asked.
“She says that she couldn’t find the tea.” Mewtwo translated as Speedy spoke keeping and innocent face on and shrugging.
“What do you plan to do about Entei’s horde?” Billy, one of Ryukyu’s friends asked.
“We can take care of that later,” Mewtwo said, “Dome lives very far away and used agility when he came here. It took him about a month to get here with agility.” Far away, the army lead by Entei was slowly approaching Limewall. Speedy took Dome on her back and dashed upstairs to let the nurse take a look at him.
Mewtwo and Ryukyu talked in hushed voices for a while with everybody else casting puzzled and worried looks at the two in between bites. The ones most worried were Ryukyu’s pokémon. Primeape, who was never a bright one, didn’t seem to know what was happenign so continued eating in a cheery manner.
Entei’s army had already marched long and far from their starting place (which happened to be Goldenrod). Most of the army was tired, but in fear of Entei, never stopped. The captains tried to boost their troops’ morale, but they were tired themselves, and their attempts were half-hearted. Their provisions were running low and they were hoping to run into some unlucky sap with lots of food.
Limewall’s people had altogether stopped eating and the suspense of Dome’s words and Ryukyu’s decision tied a knot in their stomachs. All except for Primeape, who kept going at it…
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Chap. 1's only 2 pages *sigh*. I'll get it out by Tues.
, show freak
Prizes won: Gold Charizard Plushie, a 5" Charmander light(it's tail lights up), a zinc Sandslash scale, a "Magikarp's revenge" trophy, a Crystal Celebi trophy, a frozen Kabuto and a magic Magikarp
The Other Other White Meat
Posts: 98
(12/10/03 9:23 pm)
Re: Starting the line of re-posts...
for some reason, I dont remember this one at all... oh well.
No offence intended, but this fic needs a LOT of work. I'm not sure if we still have it, but remember those old "official rules for writing pokemon fan fiction?" threads? you might want to look 'em up.
The (#%^&) Falcon (*%!@) Fighter
Posts: 212
(2/22/04 5:28 pm)
Re: Starting the line of re-posts...
a LOT? Dude, the first few chapters of my fic need more tan A LOT of work. That's wy I'm considering only starting to post newer chapters since the chapters that I wrote about 2 years ago aren't....let's just say not up to standards I expect. Fact is, I thought that I could get enough time to re-post the first couple chaps like wildfire, ten finally get going with some good solid writing.
Prizes won: Gold Charizard Plushie, a 5" Charmander light(it's tail lights up), a zinc Sandslash scale, a "Magikarp's revenge" trophy, a Crystal Celebi trophy, a frozen Kabuto and a magic Magikarp
Sentretcookie Goddess of the Demon Shepherd's Pie
Posts: 105
(2/24/04 4:38 pm)
Yo!
Oh. My. God. It's MasF.
Yeah, I remember this... only my taste in writing has completely chnaged over the last year, so I have completely different opinions.
Anyway... I noticed quite a few grammar errors, and it lacked description. The writing just didn't... flow well, you know what I'm saying? It seemed to be a little bumpy, and I didn't liek your first line much, either.
Oh well. Looks interesting enough! ^.~ I'll stay with it, if you're still around to post more. (Nobody is. Eek! This place is DEAD.)
). But there will be improvements starting Chap. 7. If you can hang tight with me till then, then please do so.
, show freak
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