catsMarch5 And the cats go marching on...
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(10/28/03 4:41 pm)
The Third
I somehow got this idea while I was playing my new Ruby game along with on how people might react if I set up my own suicide as an accident. No, I'm not going to commit suicide. This is also a product of French III class.
The Third
It was her fault. It wasn't her fault.
She was becoming desperate. Why would she be desperate?
Her dreams weren't coming true. Her dreams was coming true.
She was stupid. She was intelligent.
Normalcy wasn't broken. Normalcy was.
I was tired. Tired of them talking about what she was, what she did, what she couldn't do, what she could do. I didn't like all of this.....this........parallelism. Parallelism, that's the word right. It means double standard...right?
I'm starting to forget my name. It's odd, just because she was, I don't hear it. My name. They call us by number. I'm the third. I don't like that name.
The first had a name too, he remembers his name but won't tell us what it is. He knows everyone's names but he won't tell us....like with his name. He says we have to play along. When the time comes we'll escape.
He doesn't believe in the fifth or the sixth. That they weren't with her as long as we have. He also doubts the fourth. That she's getting too used to this treatment.
I don't know why he's telling me this. On why he, me and the second, as they call her, are running, escaping. He says that only the three of us actually grieved. That we now have a part of our souls gone. The second nodded, with sad eyes, offering up a plan of escape even.
I didn't understand. Just sitting there wondering why can't I be as smart or as wise. I feel that I'm only tagging along. The first went on, saying that we have the power, wisdom, intelligence and loyalty. We are leaving and look for someone like her.
I don't want anyone like her. I just want our person back. I don't want a different person with a different smile, different voice and a different warmth.
Is that what led me here? Standing in......a graveyard? Where the was are now?
I felt the dirt gripped under my feet, absorbing the darkness and ignoring the small lights beyond.
The first and second don't need me, they can find someone else on their own. The fourth, fifth and sixth doesn't need me either. They're fine living with the family and friends.
I don't like the stone in front of me, mocking me. Saying here lies Marine Hazel Voland 1987-2004, she will be missed by family and friends. The stone doesn't mention the ones that actually miss her. Instead it mentions the ones that don't understand what happened, whether it was herself or an accident.
I hate my name. I hate that I'm The Third. I know I had a much better name. I know I did.
I settled myself down in front of the stone, under the ground where my person was buried.
Why? Why? I don't know why. She saw me last didn't she.....before she fell before she disappeared from the planet.
I closed my eyes, all this thinking and planning and unexpectedness tired me out. She won't mind if I sleep with her tonight.
"Inuko...Inuko" Someone was calling. I woke up. It was her. She smiled at me. I ran to her...in this white place... Who know where we were? I didn't care...
~News Report~
The body of the missing Mightyena has been found two days after it's disappearance was reported. The body was found on top of it's trainer's, Marine Voland, burial site. Authorities believed that the pokemon wanted to be reunited with his trainer and has succeeded. Also Voland's Blaziken and Swellow has gone missing, believed to have simply run away into the wild.
Voland's other three pokemon, a Manectric, Wailord and Mawile, are now in the care of the deceased's family and friends.
Voland was expected to compete in the Hoenn championships but that changed upon her death from falling over the balcony railing. Authorities are uncertain whether the death was suicide or an accident. In either case it's a tragic death.
Yeah, that's the entire thing. I have an odd imagination. Anyways, feel free to comment. *goes off to write some more if she can*
I finally put some type of fiction up. That's Against the Will, in the general forum. Chapters 1-6 are available to read. I also put up a short story titled Silence. So go there and read them.
spectacular suicune Jade, Friend of Wolvite (and all things pink and fluffy)
Posts: 264
(10/28/03 5:28 pm)
Re: The Third
Awesome...I love this fic...you get the last of my votes now...
~Jade, "Ohh...Mightyena!"...
You mean you can put something worthwhile down here? Interesting...
The Writing Dino Moderator
Posts: 74
(10/29/03 4:12 pm)
Beautiful . . .
Awesomly good, well writ, I enjoyed the not knowing part of this story.
If there is one thing I'd suggest, it'd be this - convery more emotion. There is a lot of emotional energies that is associated with the death of someone and if you conveyed more of that emotion you could actually have something publishable. Seriously, it is that good.
Re: Beautiful . . .
I really got into that. Of course, being me, I didn't get it at first, until it mentioned the other six. Then it made sense. Awesome writing-ness all around.
~Shiny Espeon, the writer of bad comments
For anyone who cares, I am the freak formerly known as lilangel. w0o7. Go me. *jumps off a cliff*
I have gone to find myself. If I get back before I return, keep me here.
The Third
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