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Deadlly Skittle
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(5/13/06 10:55 pm)
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Violet Mika
Name: Violet Alista Mika

Age: 16

Grade:10

Appearance:i65.photobucket.com/album.../anime.jpg
Description:
Short Brown Hair
Brown Eyes
Usually wears darker clothes, she loves black, but not in a goth way.
Always wears sunglasses outside.

Personality: Violet had always been the popular girl at her old school. She walked and talked like a cheerleader would. She has bad habits of biting her nails and twirling her hair, but tries to keep up her image. She is usually a warm-natured person, but can get mean in situations where she is pressured. She is always open to new people, unless they have talked bad about her behimd her back. She didn't date alot, because she actually loved her school work. She almost always smiles.

Special Power: Violet can cloak herself when she's nervous or scared. It has helped her in many situations, but also has gotten her into trouble many times. It doesn't work all the time. It seems like it ony works about 3 times a day, and she has no control over when it works and when it doesn't.

History: Violet has always lived in her home town of Houston, Texas her life. She lived a normal adolesent She had friends, good grades, and the mst popular girl in school. But her life started flipping the 8th grade. She started feeling self cautious, and people would claim not to see her.

Teachers started calling hume saying she was skipping class, but she was there. Her friends starting saying they couldn't find her. She was always there with them. She was always not much of a talker, but that beat her days of silence. She eventually did a search on her problems, and found out about the ability. Her parents are now sending her to Manga High for her 10th year, hoping she can control herself.

Relationships
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Mortal Enemy:
Hates:
Dislikes:
Friends:
Good Friends:
Family:
Likes:
Dating:


Example Role-paly:
Violet stopped and took one last breath before moving on towards the school. she had one blue luggage on wheels behind her, and one black back on heach shoulder. She had tried to pack light, but she couldn't it was just so hard to let it go. she stepped inside the doors feeling eyes beating into her. She felt the curiosity coming from everyone. She stopped at the door desk.

"I need a key to my dorm please, my name is Violet Mika," Violet spoke in a soft tone. The secretary stared blankly for a few moments, as if she wasn't used to seeing new students. Violet's heart pounded in her chest.

The secretary eventually said, "One moment please" and turned to search through the drawers behind her. Violet turned to examine the hallways. They looked like anyother school. What once was white walls were now faded to a dingy tan.

"Here you go," the secretary said handing her a key. Violet stuck the key in her black hand bag, grabbed her bags, and headed down the hall. She was in for quite a year


Edited by: Deadlly Skittle at: 5/13/06 11:38 pm
Bow2Gaijin
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Posts: 8
(5/14/06 1:14 am)
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Re: Violet Mika
You need to bold your sections (personality, history, etc). Also, you can have two powers.

Sorry, when I said to write more I wasn't clear. With your power, how does it work, how scared to you have to be. Your cloak, are you invisible, translucent? What about her family, what did her friends do when they discovered her power?

Edited by: Bow2Gaijin at: 5/14/06 2:08 pm
Kobita
+195 posts
I don't follow directions

Posts: 474
(5/17/06 9:19 am)
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Re: Violet Mika
What Gai Gai is trying to say is that for living sixteen years of her life, something more than that had to happen. How did she become popular or did she just have everyone gravitate to her off the bat? Did she have any accomplishments in her old school? All these little things that seem like a waste of time actually add a lot of depth to the character.

Also, the personality can be extended. How does she react in a dangerous situation? Does she panic, stand strong and yell at someone, pee herself? What do you mean by pressured? Like someone attempted to give her drugs or someone pointing a knife at her? The more in depth you are the more enjoyable the character shall be.

HellsingerAngel
Vash Hellsinger
Knight in Shrouded Armour

Posts: 1356
(5/18/06 8:43 am)
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Re: Violet Mika
Alright. Just to add to what those two said and I'll be out of your hair.

1) Your descriptions need more, but it's not the length. You use to many simple sentences(ones without adjectives{explainy stuff}) and it makes your description seem like "That's that and that's it!". Every human being is a shade of gray in most areas, so adjectives can sometimes flare something out or put it in that "Maybe I dunno" section so that people might acctually have to RP with you to find out what the limitations are(WOW! RP to find stuff out!? WHO WOULD HAVE GUESSED!?!?!?{Making fun of others, not you :P})

2)You don't need two powers. You can either have two powers, a weapon and a power, two weapons or combine your two available powers to make one advanced power or advanced weapon(one that would consist of a power and an upgrade to that power)

Hope my advice helps!

"Then again, wouldn't you thinking already be thought out, so that your thinking is involved in what you'll do? So that means if you didn't think then you wouldn't get to the same conclusion as you would if you thought about it, right? Oh well, best not to think about thinking about thinking, you think so? Well, I still say not thinking is the best way to think!" -Alex Summers, thinking about thinking

Merciah
Merciah Forigaln
Self Proclaimed Protector of MHS
Karrody de`Champion
AKA Scarey Guy

Posts: 3548
(5/18/06 7:18 pm)
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Re: Violet Mika
Actually, to edit something said above. Sorry, but no advanced powers. For new members creating new characters we do not allow this. It is a special benefit reserved for characters beyond the first that existing members have made.



^Karrody's wheels


I don't make threats or bribes.
Promises and incentives are more my style
-M.Hart






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